assallamualaikum and good evening my beloved students...

Congrates !!! some of you had completed the homework that i assigned you to do. For others please start wriring and give comment/correct your friends' writing. BELOW IS THE GUIDELINE that you have to follow. Your comment will definitely help your friend to improve.

THINGS TO LOOK AT                                                 Your comment on your friends' essay
                                                                                    (you can also use your own comment)
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1. Read the whole essay                                                              (these are only examples)
 - a. what did you like? Did you enjoy reading the essay         - interesting story but paragrapgh 2 
   or hard to understand?                                                        is confusing. Do explain to me.

2. Introduction and thesis statement
  - a. do you think the introduction is inviting/interesting?             - your intro is interesting but you      
  - b. Is the thesis statement clear and relevant to the title?            need to correct your thesis.

3. Topic sentences
  - a. what is the topic sentences in p1, p2. p3 and p4? Are            - may be you change your     
       they related to thesis statement? are they clear? Do you             topic sent in p3 to...
   have any suggestion to improve any of the topic sentences?         because it is not clear.

4. The body of your essay
  a. check the supporting details and  the elaboration for                -this is your own comment
    the topic sentence in every paragraph (p1,p2,p3,p4).
  b. how has your friend developed each paragraph?
       has she used examples/quotations/facts?
  c. are there any parts of the paragraph that do not                -can you check again this  
      support the topic sentences.                                               sentences because              
                                                                                           they aren't related to..

5. Conclusion/concluding paragaraph
   a. is there a concluding paragraph?                                     - i like the way you conclude.....
   b. does it give a summary or general statement, look to
     the future, or express a thought or opinion. If not, you
     suggest how to make it interesting.

8. Vocabulary
   a. are they any words that could be replaced so ideas          - this word "..", i can't understand.
      will be clearer?                                                                  maybe you can use this word...

9. Grammar
   a. Spelling- check whether the word is spelled wrongly.        -check dictionary for this word ".."
   b. pls check on:

     - articles : a, the, an ,zero article(-)
    -  adjectives
    - prepositions : to, from. between, on, in, at, to ,under with, by
                           behind etc.
     - subject verb agreement : He is .../she is / it is/Ali is
                                             they are/ we are?you are
     - tenses    :  present tense eg..he goes/ we go/ i go
                       past tense  eg. he went/ they went
                       perfect tense eg. have gone/ has gone
                                                  had gone
                       continuous tense : is going to/was going to
                                                  are walking/were walking
     - active sentence
     -passive sentence

NOTE:

      

Practice checking your friend's writing and write your comment. Use your knowledge that you have acquired since primary school till now....

 

I check again your essay on monday 18 june...Tqsm

 

 

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